A boy who died in a football pitch years ago come backs to play every night, so one night he comes back to play and do football skills,but this night he gets someone to play with.
one night the security sees a light shining in the other side of the football pitch so the man decides to take a close look and then he sees a boy playing football on his own at the middle of the night.
then the starts talking to the kid and then they decide to play a penalty shoot out ,so the boy takes the first shot and then he score and then man takes a shot and he scores and then after a couple of shots the man takes the most shocking he has ever taken as the ball goes trough the boy and then man gets shocked and then he finds out the kid is a ghost and then an old man who is walking by sees the ball going through the kid (ghost ) . the man gets over the shock and before he says anything the kid disappears and the ball disappears with him as well.
miracle fish scenes
the first scene is inside a car
second scene inside the class room
third scene the kid is siting in near a wall and gets bullied by
It's good to see that you have an initial idea to base your treatment on, but you do not seem to have listened to the verbal feedback I gave you in the lesson.
ReplyDeleteYou do not currently have a plot; this is a special effect, not a storyline. Think about your characters and the story you want to tell.
Don't forget that your homework is to have produced a three paragraph treatment for your story by Tuesday's lesson. You can work harder than this Mohamed.
Much better! You have a proper start for a treatment now! You now need to do the same for your treatment; break it down into scenes, each with a heading from my blog post to give the scene's location, and a brief description of what happens in the scene.
ReplyDeleteMuch better work Mohamed.